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Senshokukiba
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 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

I’m currently writing an essay on pitbulls for my accelerated English class. Here are a few bits and pieces of what I’m going to discuss. I plan on adding a lot more. What do you think if what i’ve got so far? Is there any thing you disagree with? Is there some thing that should not be included. I’ve only got one week to create it.


Pitbulls, like all breeds of dogs, show humans their feelings and emotions by using body language. They interact with other dogs using body language as well.
A dog that is extremely dominant and has become the leader of a pack may glare at others or may rub his shoulder against a human or dog of a lower rank.

Now, pitbulls are naturally dog aggressive. Pitbulls use the same body language when interacting with humans and dogs. If this is the case, then wouldn’t pitbulls be naturally humane aggressive too? I mean, a pitbull who assumes he’s the pack leader, will show humans and dogs of lower ranks that he’s the boss. It’s natural. So if a human who owned a pitbull wasn’t the pack leader, isn’t it possible that a pitbull or any other breed of dog would treat that human the way he’d treat another dog. And wouldn’t that make it more likely for the pitbull to bite or attack a human when he thinks he’s in control?

Pitbulls were originally bred to entertain crows of people. It’s very unfortunate, but it’s true. Pitbulls were continuously placed in rings to bait and fight other dogs, bulls, and even bears. Through many generations of breeding fighting dogs, pitbulls have developed this natural aggression.

People claim that pitbulls are innocent. Well, they are to some degree. Pitbulls have been in the news multiple times for attacking other animals and people. Can you really find them innocent for attacking and killing humans?
People explain that any dog can attack some one. Yes, that’s very true. Any animal could attack a human. Pitbulls have are more likely to attack though, based on the information above though.
It was because of humans though that pitulls developed this aggression in the first place. They are innocent in some ways, but in others, they’re not.

How can you hate those people for making pitbulls for that purpose though when it was them who developed the pitbull in the first place? Does that make any sense?
If humans hadn’t wanted a dog that could entertain them by fighting, pitbulls would never have been developed. You pitbull owners should be thankful because if humans hadn’t gotten bored, your faithful companion wouldn’t be by your side.

I’ve noticed a lot of pitbull breeders. Many of the ones I found were run by men who only seemed to own pitbulls because they’re ‘big and bad’. A lot of these kennels were focused on making large sized pitbulls that could do weight pulling and such. I discovered that many of these men had tattoos, threw many parties, and were ‘daredevils’. It’s kennels like that, that make pitbulls seem like ferocious beasts that will attack and kill any living thing in sight!
I’ve also seen some great kennels that offer pitbulls. I was happy to see that some of these kennels had entered their dogs in agility and obedience contest and weren’t focused on developing big, monstrous pitbulls. They were more into making energetic play companions that were full of love.

A pitbull is like a loaded firearm. If you point the muzzle of your firearm in a safe direction, it won’t hit any one. If you point it in the wrong direction, it might hit some one. Pitbulls, if not trained properly, can become dangerous, just like a firearm when it’s pointed in the wrong direction. A pitbull who’s trained and controlled correctly will be safe like a firearm that’s pointed in a safe direction.
Remember this though. You should never rely on a firearm’s safety. Realistically, any breed of dog can be compared to a firearm though.

Banning any bull breed is wrong! Pitbulls aren’t just owned and raised by abusive savages or dangerous criminals. There are many pitbulls out there that having loving and caring owners, including many people on this site. By banning the breed, these owners are being punished.

Pitbulls are being banned from every where. Some airports don’t allow bull breeds any more. Once airport doesn’t allow these dogs any more because one escaped from its cage and went running through the airport, trying to find its owner. Some apartments don’t allow pitbulls any more. I found one post on this board regarding apartments. The apartment didn’t allow some bull breed. A person living in the complex had a completely different breed, but this person’s neighbors were stating that the dog was some breed that was not allowed. It wasn’t true though. My dad lives in a house that does not allow pitbulls, Rottweilers, or Doberman Pinschers. I’ve also got an old friend whose landlord doesn’t allow pitbulls to live in her housing area because one attacked him. Those are several examples of breed discrimination.

I think it is important for pitbull owners to realize that their dogs are naturally more aggressive than other breed types.

Pitbulls have passed personality tests, training tests, and many other tests! You know why that is though? It’s because the dog’s that participated were actually trained correctly. Pitbulls can have wonderful personalities and make wonderful pets it given the opportunity.

- Audrey
05/03/07  08:17pm

 #1269146


KrazyKelli
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   Message To: Senshokukiba   In reference to Message Id: 1269086


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

I am having doubts towards this being for an English class, even if this was in bits and pieces. The main reason is that, in some of the paragraphs, you’re talking to people directly on this forum and not to some English teacher. You’re also giving examples towards only things you’ve seen on this forum with no clarification of what you’re talking about (so if someone who wasn’t on this forum read it, they’d wonder what you were talking about.) You’d have to alter loads and/or remove references to make it otherwise. You should find better references than heresay in this forum; such as websites more specifically dedicated to the history of pitbulls

You should not rely so heavily on spell-check and proofread what you type as well. Also try not using the same expressive word more than once in a sentence (example: "Pitbulls have are more likely to attack though, based on the information above though.")


Since this specific forum is so heavily into loving and protecting pitbulls, I doubt you’re going to get many fond or helpful answers for your class project. Most likely this thread will be filled with repeated pictures of the dog breed and people beeming, "See? My dog is wonderful! Pits aren’t bad at all!"



05/03/07  09:14pm

 #1269177


Senshokukiba
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   Message To: KrazyKelli   In reference to Message Id: 1269146


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

Well, I started writing this so I could post it on the forum. After I got into it, thought I’d use some of what I have for my English class. I’m allowed to write about any thing we want. I’m glad. I love writing, especially on topics like this. So you are right about what you said at first to some degree.

I can’t stand having mispelled words. When I’m typing on Word, I can’t stand having little red squigly lines under my text. It bugs me a lot. That’s why I correct most of my work, even when making minor notes. I can’t stand sentence fragments either. That’s why I have trouble taking notes.

I’ve been editing my sentences. I’m not talking about Repticzone in my actual final draft. I actually realized that people would have no clue about what I’m talking about. Not to mention, my teacher probably wouldn’t like me refering this site.

I thought your tips were helpful.



05/03/07  09:47pm

 #1269214


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   Message To: Senshokukiba   In reference to Message Id: 1269177


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

good luck. you like writing? where do you live? i live in state college, PA and there is this wind in the willow or something like that. you should enter. if your essay is the bet you win 25 bucks. it can be about anything and in any form. you should try. idk what the boundarys are for it and how far it goes out but i thought that you would like it.
and i agree that people here are kinda byest and stuff.
i also agree what you said about it being the dog and the human’s fault.

but i think that it is the current or few generations owners that did it. i mean you could i have very very very nice pitt but an evil owner or virvera (srry suck at spelling)

thats just my thoughts. anyway it seems good!
05/03/07  10:08pm

 #1269360


KrazyKelli
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   Message To: Senshokukiba   In reference to Message Id: 1269177


 I�m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I�m talking? What do you think?

There are some good grammar and punctuation books out there that you should look into - such as the "___ for dummies" series, "The Everything Grammar and Style", and "Eats, Shoots, and Leaves" (the latter is more about someone’s view on punctuation instead of actual lessons.) If you hate fragmented sentences, it’s always good to learn of ways to avoid them. The semi-colon, colon, dash, brackets, and parathesis can be your friend.
05/03/07  11:48pm

 #1269497


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   Message To: Senshokukiba   In reference to Message Id: 1269086


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

I honestly could not read this entire thing, I got too bored. But the parts I did read it seemed like you didn’t know all that much about pits. Maybe if you cut down all

the


spaces

between


paragraphs, you’d have a more interesting less boring read on your hands. One thing I can say is a puppy is a puppy, no matter what "the breed was bred to do" originally.
05/04/07  03:13am

 #1270511


Senshokukiba
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   Message To: ShellBabe   In reference to Message Id: 1269214


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

I do like writing. I prefer animal related topics. About two months ago, I had to write a report about religions and beliefs in some country. It was a boring subject. I didn’t enjoy writing about that.
My teacher gave us a break though. My teacher was going to make my class write a summary on what happened in Romen and Juliet. I guess he changed his mind though.... I’m glad.

Writing contest? I’ve never really entered one. I entered some really small contests when I was back in sixth grade. I entered an online writing contests about a year ago, but I didn’t win. I live In Idaho, the land of potatoes. Twenty- five dollars? I barely make that in one day at my job! T.T I work at Domino’s. Hehe. It’s better than working at MCdonalls though. The only places that higher fifteen year olds down here are fast food restraunts though. I work three to four hours Monday- Thursday. I work on Saturdays when ever they need me. I feel so poor.

It’s supposed to be detailed. It’s worth thirty points. You got bored? I see. My writing usually isn’t entertaining. I usually just try to make it descriptive and imformative. By spaces, do you mean paragraphs, Katiesh? I probably shouldn’t have had so many paragraphs with what I wrote, but I think it’s fine. In my final draft, I’ll make sure that I check this.
And I bet you’re an expert on the breed, Katiesh! ^.^
05/05/07  03:18am

 #1270539


Katiesh
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   Message To: Senshokukiba   In reference to Message Id: 1270511


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

I’ve always been taught that the amount of spaces people a paragraph makes people just skip on important chapters. Also, I don’t know when...Oh, yes, maybe in 6th grade? I learned that when writing articles and descriptive information you should probably keep it enteraining for the readers or they are just going to blow it all off (Much like I did)
And no, I’m not a pitty "expert" but some of the things you used in your "article" were completely wrong, and I sure as Hell know I’m not going to compare a dog to a firearm no matter what breed the dog is. Oh and also, punctuation is your friend , I do it too in papers that I’m writing >:|
05/05/07  04:52am

 #1270541


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   Message To: Katiesh   In reference to Message Id: 1270539


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

Ew. Sorry for MY mistakes, this laptop blows!
05/05/07  04:56am

 #1271054


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   Message To: Katiesh   In reference to Message Id: 1270541


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

If this is supposed to be a true essay you should stick to a format like the first paragraoh being an introduction with the points you are going to make, pick three points and write a paragraph about each. What I would do is paragraph 1, history and background of the breed, p2 bad reputation in the media regarding attacks and how mislabeled most attacks are and how they happen, for instance most attacks are on owners or children by unfixed untrained male dogs, p3 breed legislation or how to fix the pitbull problem of overbreeding and bad breeding. Final paragraph summarize your points. Stick to facts, use dates and cite sources, don’t use feelings so much as it makes it less convincing.
05/05/07  05:20pm

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   Message To: Petjunkie   In reference to Message Id: 1271054


 I’m creating an essay on pitbulls for a class I’m talking? What do you think?

From my reading I have learned that pitbulls were NOT originally used for fighting. Their true use was as a farm dog that would grab the farm bull by the nose and hold him still while the farmer tended to the cows or whatever he may have needed to do. Horses and cattle have a nerve in their nose that when pinched and held makes them become still. Its still done today with horses, its called "twitching" and as soon as the bullring was invented for use with bulls the pitbull wasnt needed any more. Since they were so strong and dedicated to their masters they were then used for fighting.
05/06/07  01:21am


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